Positives:
Like the composition of two actors sitting on beach
Music was good- I will be changing this anyway due to copyright, however it gives me an idea the types of music I will use
Constructive criticism:
telling the story line a bit too quickly- when I have filmed the remaining shots I am hoping that some areas will be cut down to make room for the end to be slower
a bit too slow- this will be cut down due to understanding through voiceovers
make sure non shaky shots are static- most of this will be re-filmed anyway, however I now plan on using the steady cam, with a few more static shots
want sans serif fonts not too many changes
text in order of sentence
not enough close ups- want to empathise- I have filmed a lot more close ups than were used so I plan on using this in place of some less effective shots and to enable the audience to empathise much better
try cropping some of the shots- I am planning for this to be cut down due to the addition of the voice overs making it clearer without the addition of the shots
alter lighting and mise-en-scene in post production to look more professional- this is a personal target as I believe that the editing needs to have a much more fluid effect throughout and to match up the two different cameras used
cut scene of walking to where they already walking
too long looking at computer and some clips are too long
greyness and brightness
snappyer
consistent titles
sound voiceovers record on voice notes
reverse sweep transition sound for change in music + lens flare
titles + Gaussian blur, pretty colourful blur, same text greyscale for darker, try with background and curley font